留学申请书个人陈述的写作要点及禁忌

发布时间:2017-02-17 编辑:力民

  美国留学申请中的个人陈述是至为重要的一个环节。个人陈述不仅仅是表达申请的目的和动机,更是要表达出申请者自己的想法,下面YJBYS小编为大家讲解留学申请中个人陈述的写作要点及禁忌,并附优秀范文!

  留学申请个人陈述在写作时候应该:

  1、要诚实地写作。如果你发现你的读者能够从别人那里读到和你的文章类似的内容,那请你回到草稿本从头再来。

  2、要在整体上传达积极的信息。批判主义不会获得招生委员会的好感。

  3、要注重文章的深度,而不是广度。着重一个事件或想法,而不是对全部的事情泛泛而谈。要进行个性化和故事性的思考。

  4、要抛弃你的第一个想法或视角。因为那一个往往被太多人想到和使用过。

  5、要写得有趣但更要写出自己。传达你真实的想法和感受。别企图给自己加上你并不具有的情趣、价值和观念。

  6、要写那些你亲眼看到、亲身经历的事情,而不要写超越你作为一个年轻人所能经历的事情。书本上的东西和其它的二手经验无法告诉你的读者你是怎样的人。

  7、要写那些你感受强烈的事情。如果你写自己不感兴趣的题目,那么你就会显得不真诚或缺乏激情。

  8、要写你自己,同时也要写别人。很大程度上我们的个体是在和别人的交往过程中被定义的。在你的文章中体现这一点可以使你显得不那么以自我为中心。

  9、要写出你的丰富经历,但是要避免过多的想象。可以从景象、声音甚至气味等各种角度全方位地将你和你的读者联系起来。但要当心别过分使用你的想象力。否则结果就是显现一种刻意的、不自然的风格,让你的读者觉得你是在故作有创意。

  留学申请个人陈述的写作要注意:

  1、不要让别人,特别是你的父母来替你决定该写什么。你可以和别人一起想点子,但是千万别问“我该写什么?”。

  2、不要试图推销你自己,或企图说服或证明你有多棒、多聪明或多有成就。你的终极理论或对世界问题的解决方案并不能打动读者。你必须承认,在你人生目前的阶段,你的疑问比你知道的答案要多。让你的文章给你自己一个机会去思考生活,去提出有思想的问题,然后去探究和调查,而不是去告诉读者结论。(这一条更加适合申请本科的高中生)

  3、不要把申请信写成一篇学术文章。一篇能够炫耀你在某一个领域经过调研的学术文章并不能告诉你的读者你是谁,反而会让他们怀疑这是不是你以前的某篇学期论文。

  4、不要去猜测招生委员会希望你写什么内容。这种思路的结果会是一篇没有差错但是却很平庸的文章。

  5、不要赘述读者已经知道的东西。别再三强调那些在申请材料的其它部分已经提到的你的一些成就。

  6、不要显得过于理想化。世界的和平和干净的环境确实是值得追求的理想,但是不要显得教条和过于狂热。任何事情都有两面,所以请全面地考虑问题,否则会显得过于天真。

  7、不要把你的申请信浪费在解释你的缺点或不足上。一次低分、一个难看的SAT成绩或乏善可陈的课余活动都不值得在申请信中加以解释。如果你必须要为你的某个不足辩护,请打电话(匿名地)到学校询问你是否可以附加一份独立的解释作为你申请材料的附件。另一种选择是,请你的推荐人在推荐信中为你澄清。

  8、不要写任何会让你的读者感到尴尬或不舒服的内容。谈论一些敏感的问题,诸如吸毒、性、宗教信仰或政治观点并没有错。但务必小心,避免极端化并使用尊敬的语调,否则你可能把事情搞砸。

  9、不要把申请信写成一篇社论。学校欢迎你的见解,但是别像站在演讲台上那样,对其它观点进行大肆抨击。

  10、不要提及哪怕是一点流行的电视电影、歌手或演员,哪怕他们对你很重要。另外,不要提及Dr.Suess的书(招生办公室的废止篓里每年秋天都塞满了提及Dr.Suess的申请信)(Dr.Suess是美国著名的作家和漫画家,曾获得普利策和奥斯卡奖,影响了美国几代青少年)。

  优秀范文

  Ten years from now Tim Dickson won't even remember my name. The unknowing recipient of my undying love for two years, Tim had been everything a girl could ever ask for: smart, handsome, witty, and athletic, with a voice that could make angels weep. Everyone knew his name. To a shy little country mouse, nearly invisible in our student body, he was the epitome of manliness. I sat in my corner of room C-119 and gazed adoringly at his profile as he amazed the class of Modern World History with his dashing style. Carefully planning the routes to my classes to coincide with his, I was his silent shadow.

  After fourteen months, contrary to my hopes, Tim still was not aware of my existence. Determined to bring myself to his attention, I staged my entrance to his heart with all the flair I could muster. I would breach his defenses at the next history oral presentation in the guise of the dashing Cardinal Richelieu.

  It was now or never! Striding into the classroom, my head raised, eyes flashing, I stood proudly, the colors of my eighteenth-century costume catching the light and giving me courage. My opening line shook with tight emotion. "Gentlemen, I am disgusted!" My voice alternately lashed out in rage and purred in soft persuasion. I gloried in my elocution. Each word was power. My voice rose to a brilliant conclusion, and I stood with my arms outstretched and my head bowed in submission.

  Dead silence.

  My left knee trembled uncontrollably. Why did no one speak? My hands began to shake so I pulled them behind me-like one condemned. My eyes gauged the distance to the door.

  Then someone began to clap. More joined in. Tim looked into my eyes and smiled. He smiled!

  Joy, oh joy. My soul overflowed with rapture. I had done it! He noticed me! All the shame, all the worry, and all the castigation melted away in that moment. I knew how to make him love me. I simply had to speak better, sing better, act better, and write better than anyone else. Determined, I joined competitions, played in concerts, and wrote essays that were read in class. When Tim transferred to the A.P. class, so did I. I threw myself into class discussions, attempting to dazzle him with my intelligence and intrepidity. Making friends with his friends, I dogged his steps.

  The next summer Tim moved away. I never heard from him again. But the transformation in me had taken place. Now I was involved for the simple pleasure of being involved. Challenging people surrounded me. Biff taught me to love. Dave taught me to laugh. Ramez taught me to break my limits. Alit gave me confidence. Whenever I was in danger of reverting to a wallflower, one of my new friends would drag me into another club or activity.

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